Black Ghost

7/10 It's okay :P MM

Pretty good chapter, even though I just came into the story. XD The only complaint was that some of the dialouge seemed a bit off, but nothing really major. One ...

Hey, Lynlyn. ^_^ On to the critique, then? :P Isaac rubbed his eyes and rolled out of his hammock . “Who is it?” The sailor shrugged as the youth rolled ...

The quiet crunching of snow filled the night. Step by step, Crystal walked in heavy footfalls, seeming to sink deeper each time. Her eyes stayed ahead, with as much focus ...

...Currently I'm reading The Grapes of Wrath . And that's about it at the moment. XD MM

7/10, it's a star or something? I think I see a peace sign as well. *shrugs* MM

It's not too short; there's such a thing as flash fiction. ;) But even though I really loved the vivid imagery, I didn't really get a sense of the point ...

Hey Kylan. ^_^ I read Honor #1 to understand what was happening in #2, and I must say I enjoyed both of them. I love the way that you set ...

Exactly. ^_^

Thanks guys! sokool15>> I fixed the "even" thing, thanks for catching that...and I changed the hair description. More clear? MM

OMG, if you could get it like Critique Circle, that would be awesome. That site is nice and all, but I don't like their...let's say *style*. The forums here are ...

I like to critique, but I loathe the way I have to do it. Always scrolling up and down, quoting takes a while. :P Maybe something to make critiquing easier? ...

Actually, I have been in a cave, and a very beautiful one at that. :) It's in a Lebanon (the middle-eastern country, not city) and here are some pictures in ...

Claudette, I totally get the lack of meaning, since I tried too hard to conform this to the purpose of referring to an object. XD I guess I'll just throw ...

I've never been able to accept my life as it is; I feel I mustn’t. Always trapped within the thought of Night and Day, a concept that has always convexed ...